so i just want to see if you guys can help me organize my thoughts

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coltsfan715

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That is a good question Kate. I did several reoprts and essays on CF when I was in high school too. It was easy for me to get the info so that was the main reason I chose it as a topic so often.

I agree with Kylie about awareness being such a big thing. Awareness can cross over into fundraising, research, finding a cure, therapies, other CF related problems and so on.

I always had a hard time starting a paper out too - but once I got started it just seemed to flow. If you wanted to go the route of awareness you could maybe do something like start out giving stats - like every year x number of kids are born with this disease, this disease can affect blah, blah and blah, x number of people are carriers for this recessive disease and don't many don't even know it. It is the number one killer of causcasian children and so on. Then just ask a general question about the disease - like do you know what disease I am talking about? or something along those lines that sounds better. Then say Cystic Fibrosis. Then from there you could go into a little on how CF can affect your body, maybe a little about national/government funding for CF - if there is any (I don't know) and funding that comes from the CF Foundation or foundations like the Boomer Esiason Foundation. You could do a paragraph on therapies and how the money raised helps to find new therapies and meds for people with CF. Then from there you could mention people that have CF - like Boomer Esiason's son Gunner, Celine Dion's neice that passed away when she was 16, Tammy Cochran (country singer) who had 2 brothers pass from CF. Then you could give stats on how many adults are living with CF and how many kids (18 and under) are living with CF to kind of put into perspective. If you want to mention you have CF you can - or you could leave it open ended and just say - I happen to know that we all go to school with someone that has CF - so whether you know it or not you know someone with this disease.

If you are going to raise awareness and make people care making it personal is the best way to go. Giving someone an actual physical thing they can look at and say that person has CF can go a long way.

Well I went on much longer than I thought I would. Take Care and good luck with your paper. I hope you are able to get the ball rolling soon and I am sure it will come easy once you get started.

Take Care,
Lindsey
 
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Chill4291

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Hey Kate,
What about organ donation? You could talk about all the people who die everyday waiting for transplants, how many lives one person can save once they have passed away themselves. about how everything from skin, lungs, hearts, eyes etc, can be donated to help someone else. If you think it's something you might be interested in, I can put you in contact with someone who does public speaking on the subject. I'm sure he would have some great advice on the speaking about the topic.
-Bill
 
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Chill4291

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Hey Kate,
What about organ donation? You could talk about all the people who die everyday waiting for transplants, how many lives one person can save once they have passed away themselves. about how everything from skin, lungs, hearts, eyes etc, can be donated to help someone else. If you think it's something you might be interested in, I can put you in contact with someone who does public speaking on the subject. I'm sure he would have some great advice on the speaking about the topic.
-Bill
 
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Chill4291

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Hey Kate,
What about organ donation? You could talk about all the people who die everyday waiting for transplants, how many lives one person can save once they have passed away themselves. about how everything from skin, lungs, hearts, eyes etc, can be donated to help someone else. If you think it's something you might be interested in, I can put you in contact with someone who does public speaking on the subject. I'm sure he would have some great advice on the speaking about the topic.
-Bill
 
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65rosessamurai

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Using Risa's Idea, sounds like a good way for the effect that your speech catches their attention, and at the end you "let em' have it!" with some statement to drive it into their minds...this may even make a good speech for "CF awareness". I like Risa's idea, and hope when you get your 'A' for the class, you'll post your speech here! LOL!
Thinking not everyone who hears your speech is aware that you have CF, I think it would be effective for those people, while the ones who do know you have CF happen to be caught with some thoughts like maybe "gosh, I didn't know that"!
I also thought that like essays, speeches needed an outline, first. I had done more essays in High School than speeches (did only ONE speech in school!), but it seemed that an outline could easily organize your thoughts when you write.
 
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65rosessamurai

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Using Risa's Idea, sounds like a good way for the effect that your speech catches their attention, and at the end you "let em' have it!" with some statement to drive it into their minds...this may even make a good speech for "CF awareness". I like Risa's idea, and hope when you get your 'A' for the class, you'll post your speech here! LOL!
Thinking not everyone who hears your speech is aware that you have CF, I think it would be effective for those people, while the ones who do know you have CF happen to be caught with some thoughts like maybe "gosh, I didn't know that"!
I also thought that like essays, speeches needed an outline, first. I had done more essays in High School than speeches (did only ONE speech in school!), but it seemed that an outline could easily organize your thoughts when you write.
 
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65rosessamurai

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Using Risa's Idea, sounds like a good way for the effect that your speech catches their attention, and at the end you "let em' have it!" with some statement to drive it into their minds...this may even make a good speech for "CF awareness". I like Risa's idea, and hope when you get your 'A' for the class, you'll post your speech here! LOL!
Thinking not everyone who hears your speech is aware that you have CF, I think it would be effective for those people, while the ones who do know you have CF happen to be caught with some thoughts like maybe "gosh, I didn't know that"!
I also thought that like essays, speeches needed an outline, first. I had done more essays in High School than speeches (did only ONE speech in school!), but it seemed that an outline could easily organize your thoughts when you write.
 
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scabaskiblio

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From the way you described it, it sounds like you are supposed to give a speech that can be debated, and in that case, general CF awareness might not be appropriate. Who could argue against greater awareness of CF? It doesn't present a good argumentative topic. What I think would be a better topic for argument, one for which you could use the specific example of a person with CF, is the health care system in the U.S. and how difficult it can be for some people with pre-existing conditions to get coverage. You could argue for universal health care. You could even use that Jason guy who has been the subject of so much controversy here lately as an example. But definitely, I think health insurance would be a great issue. If not that, why not talk about smoking laws? I don't know where you are from, but in Ohio it was just on the ballot to ban smoking in all public places (it passed, yay!). This is a topic that definitely affects the lives of CFers and one that I personally feel very passionately about. Just an idea.
 
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scabaskiblio

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From the way you described it, it sounds like you are supposed to give a speech that can be debated, and in that case, general CF awareness might not be appropriate. Who could argue against greater awareness of CF? It doesn't present a good argumentative topic. What I think would be a better topic for argument, one for which you could use the specific example of a person with CF, is the health care system in the U.S. and how difficult it can be for some people with pre-existing conditions to get coverage. You could argue for universal health care. You could even use that Jason guy who has been the subject of so much controversy here lately as an example. But definitely, I think health insurance would be a great issue. If not that, why not talk about smoking laws? I don't know where you are from, but in Ohio it was just on the ballot to ban smoking in all public places (it passed, yay!). This is a topic that definitely affects the lives of CFers and one that I personally feel very passionately about. Just an idea.
 
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scabaskiblio

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From the way you described it, it sounds like you are supposed to give a speech that can be debated, and in that case, general CF awareness might not be appropriate. Who could argue against greater awareness of CF? It doesn't present a good argumentative topic. What I think would be a better topic for argument, one for which you could use the specific example of a person with CF, is the health care system in the U.S. and how difficult it can be for some people with pre-existing conditions to get coverage. You could argue for universal health care. You could even use that Jason guy who has been the subject of so much controversy here lately as an example. But definitely, I think health insurance would be a great issue. If not that, why not talk about smoking laws? I don't know where you are from, but in Ohio it was just on the ballot to ban smoking in all public places (it passed, yay!). This is a topic that definitely affects the lives of CFers and one that I personally feel very passionately about. Just an idea.
 
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Rokiss12

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hey everyone! thank you so much for responding! everyone has awesome ideas... the organ donation one, bill, was one i hadn't heard! nice thinking <img src="i/expressions/face-icon-small-smile.gif" border="0"> hehe...

but i definitly think valerie got it to click for me, i guess i just wasnt getting that im supposed to be writing a debtable speech, lol.

almost everyone in my school knows i have CF, im very open about it, so it would hard to write about the disease in the 3rd person, but i really like the idea...maybe i'll do that for another speech outside of school... <img src="i/expressions/face-icon-small-smile.gif" border="0">

at this point, CF is one of the main things i feel passionate about, but i also have other passions. I started writing late last night about civic duty and how it is important for the people of our country to get out and vote instead of staying at how thinking about voting, or helping our coutry. i seem to be on a role, however, i am famous for erasing papers and starting all over again in the last second...so haha.

thanks again so much you guys helped SO much...im so bad at this essay thing :p
 
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Rokiss12

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hey everyone! thank you so much for responding! everyone has awesome ideas... the organ donation one, bill, was one i hadn't heard! nice thinking <img src="i/expressions/face-icon-small-smile.gif" border="0"> hehe...

but i definitly think valerie got it to click for me, i guess i just wasnt getting that im supposed to be writing a debtable speech, lol.

almost everyone in my school knows i have CF, im very open about it, so it would hard to write about the disease in the 3rd person, but i really like the idea...maybe i'll do that for another speech outside of school... <img src="i/expressions/face-icon-small-smile.gif" border="0">

at this point, CF is one of the main things i feel passionate about, but i also have other passions. I started writing late last night about civic duty and how it is important for the people of our country to get out and vote instead of staying at how thinking about voting, or helping our coutry. i seem to be on a role, however, i am famous for erasing papers and starting all over again in the last second...so haha.

thanks again so much you guys helped SO much...im so bad at this essay thing :p
 
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Rokiss12

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hey everyone! thank you so much for responding! everyone has awesome ideas... the organ donation one, bill, was one i hadn't heard! nice thinking <img src="i/expressions/face-icon-small-smile.gif" border="0"> hehe...

but i definitly think valerie got it to click for me, i guess i just wasnt getting that im supposed to be writing a debtable speech, lol.

almost everyone in my school knows i have CF, im very open about it, so it would hard to write about the disease in the 3rd person, but i really like the idea...maybe i'll do that for another speech outside of school... <img src="i/expressions/face-icon-small-smile.gif" border="0">

at this point, CF is one of the main things i feel passionate about, but i also have other passions. I started writing late last night about civic duty and how it is important for the people of our country to get out and vote instead of staying at how thinking about voting, or helping our coutry. i seem to be on a role, however, i am famous for erasing papers and starting all over again in the last second...so haha.

thanks again so much you guys helped SO much...im so bad at this essay thing :p
 
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Scarlett81

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Getting started is always the hardest part. I think you've had some good suggestions already.
Ask yourself-what do you want to say, what do you want your overall message to be, how do you want the reader to feel? Moved? Informed? Do you want to just stae the facts, or convey emotion?
I'd write an outline-maybe make it 4 parts or so. Intro, 1st part of Body, 2nd part of Body and Conclusion. Don't write your outline word for word, just a rough idea. A map of the what the whole paper will say.

Hope you get a good and idea and a good grade!
 
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Scarlett81

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Getting started is always the hardest part. I think you've had some good suggestions already.
Ask yourself-what do you want to say, what do you want your overall message to be, how do you want the reader to feel? Moved? Informed? Do you want to just stae the facts, or convey emotion?
I'd write an outline-maybe make it 4 parts or so. Intro, 1st part of Body, 2nd part of Body and Conclusion. Don't write your outline word for word, just a rough idea. A map of the what the whole paper will say.

Hope you get a good and idea and a good grade!
 
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Scarlett81

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Getting started is always the hardest part. I think you've had some good suggestions already.
Ask yourself-what do you want to say, what do you want your overall message to be, how do you want the reader to feel? Moved? Informed? Do you want to just stae the facts, or convey emotion?
I'd write an outline-maybe make it 4 parts or so. Intro, 1st part of Body, 2nd part of Body and Conclusion. Don't write your outline word for word, just a rough idea. A map of the what the whole paper will say.

Hope you get a good and idea and a good grade!
 
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